I swear I had a tab open with a response to your poem and a wish to pretend that we were stuck in Poetry Month somewhere before that last poem of mine but it disappeared into the ether.
Anyway, I second Devery's welcome! You did some really interesting things with repetition of sounds and natural imagery in that first poem of yours.
Thank you! I really like your poetry. I really like everyone's poetry, actually. I haven't seen any bad ones during the times I've scrolled through this thread.
Just to participate a little more instead of just making "thanks" posts, here's the other poem I wrote on the 30th. It's not that great, but I still kinda like it.Lana
Lana tied knots in her hair.
Lana tied tongues with the slayer.
Lana was in some deep shit.
Lana was entirely sick of it.
Lana lost her heart yesterday.
Lana lost hope when he was away.
Lana kept the ring on her hand.
Lana kept herself with the man.
Lana was finally slain.
Lana was never given a grave.
Lana died a terrible death.
Lana died struggling her last breath.
Lana never got to cry,
Lana never was actually alive.